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Redone version of the first page of the commission for :iconargoforg:, because I wasn't happy with neither the plot or the look. This version features one year older Felicity and Stella, and will still consist of three pages, plus an epilogue this time. It also features dialogs ; because I originally thought it would be easier making the strip without speech, but actually, the speech allows for an easy introduction of the (small) backstory, and is a good support for the expressions of the characters, as well.

As I'm writing this, I have perfect ideas of what each page will contain, and page 2 is halfway sketched.

Even though the page features the Metaworld characters and universe, it is not in any way related to the true Metaworld story.

edit : Since I was told that the characters didn't blend well with the background, I redrew part of the backgrounds : that is to say refine the clouds and add a lineart to the rocks and trees. Also edited the hands a little bit.

I'm actually using this commission comic as a way for me to see which style I will be using for the actual Metaworld comic, so there may be more edits if there are other comments on what could be improved.

Page 1 - Here
Page 2 - [link]
Page 3 - [link]

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:iconlinkrlz:
Nice start to the story you've got there.

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Commission thread - [link]

Suzumiya Haruhi no Shōshitsu comes out Spring 2010
:iconalexdemitri:
Dang, now i feel like starting a new comic. *itchy fingers, itchy mind* xP

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"If you can dodge 300 lightnings in real life, you must have nothing else better to do."
:iconryuuyamotosuwa:
o.O random comment but... nOn LISTEN to your itchy mind!!!

btw great first page Darkarcana!

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For Love...
For Future...
For our Dreams...

~~~Destiny Dreamers~~~
:iconlz0291:
nice (re)start to the story. nice outfits on the three characters so far too. the red bikini on the statue is a good contrast with the grey body imo.
:iconargoforg:
I like it a lot! While I definitely didn't find anything wrong with the first version of this, I like how this one seems to give the characters a bit of personality that went unseen in the first one (of course, the fact that the first one had no speech balloons could have more to do with that than anything)! It sorta takes the two from being hapless bystanders to taking an active part in what's happening on the lonesome beach. That's always a plus!

I'm definitely interested in seeing the direction this one goes (although I guess I have an idea! :XD:), naturally, and look forward to seeing any art you do!

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*** Creator of the Bob the Retarded Basilisk Fan Club ***

"I'mma do the things that I want to do; I ain't got a thing to prove to you." - Weezer
:iconargoforg:
PS: Your colors on this are beautiful! I love the surreal look to the backgrounds!

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*** Creator of the Bob the Retarded Basilisk Fan Club ***

"I'mma do the things that I want to do; I ain't got a thing to prove to you." - Weezer
:icondarkarcana:
About the direction it goes, you may know what the first three pages are all about, but the epilogue will be kind of a bonus page that goes a little further, so there will still be place to some surprise even for you ;)

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:iconalexdemitri:
ah-ha~

........what? D:

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"If you can dodge 300 lightnings in real life, you must have nothing else better to do."
:iconriezaki:
Yeah, j'aime bien le style général (par contre, les personnages se demarquent vachement du background, ça peut déranger). L'expression de Felicity dans la dernière case est excellente X3
waiting for page 2 >3

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